Tuesday, January 22, 2008

Sorry, Miss, None

the sun cries alone in the dark,
how come he leaves no words bring the luck,
care centuries waiting by heart,
shall end shall start choosing more a One,
the path stays with no joke regard.

he goes to the moon across the silver sky,
perhaps to see someone no lie,
the bless he gets through the bye,
no reason though he could die,
be the one who not to puzzle but dare to untie.

sorry is less love is bless,
wishing he stays with joy and grace,
even could not forget the lovely gaze,
will be waiting as heart is amazed.

none and none and none can be done,
only love and trust waiting for the One.

22nd January 2008
5.24 pm

12 comments:

Anonymous said...

nice..keep it up..

Anonymous said...

hmmm....ok

Anonymous said...

nice piece...
i think u shud use bttr punctiations.. like capital letters, apostrophy's...
coz usin only coma's doesn't really stress out the important parts in the poem..

Anonymous said...

btw .. the one above is frm me.. sam... hehe

ERu said...

thanks sam.

Ad Rifza said...

Yeah love and trust waiting for one..

You've done a good poem..keep it up..

Slmt berblog...hehe..

ERu said...

thanks pakcik ad..haha

bluecrystaldude said...

Quite impressive. However, I have to agree with what sam has said. I don't quite get the first two rows of your poem. Maybe because of lack of comma?

Anyway, keep up the good work :DD

ERu said...

thanks bluecrystaldude..really appreciate it..

Anonymous said...

Seen.

amanda said...

nice poem...i like the last part of ur poem...hehe:)

ERu said...

thanks kak yan..